The Official Writing Challenge
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01/30/14
Very interesting with great descriptions. You did a wonderful job on this one. I felt like I was there.
Interesting addaptation of a true to life story to the theme.

The concern was felt as expressed.

The story was easy to follow as read.

The conclusion might give readers hope of rising from the depths of their situation.
02/02/14
Having had been inside of a mine excursion in Cripple Creek, Colorado, many years ago, I could totally relate to your descriptive language.

For those of us not in the mining business, it would have been helpful to explain what 'the Crusher room' is used for, how it got its name, etc.

Keep up the descriptive writing.
02/04/14
Wow! I was with you the entire time I read your excellent entry. Great job with this piece.

God bless~