The Official Writing Challenge
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Profound lesson: '"It's better to not get dirty in the first place than to be sorry about it later." (and to have to be washed later!)

Well written. You tell a good story with a deep truth.

Terrific hook in the beginning. I liked the style, and the feel of the piece. Unique. Feels like it was written from the perspective of an un(der)educated objective observer.

I liked the line about counting the cracked tiles for some reason. Seemed a nice touch.
I'm not sure how I missed this one. Talk about switching styles! Wow Maxx! Incredible. Compeltely different writing style than anything you've written before and you still did a knock out job. I loved the last paragraph. Very interesting lesson. The mud being symbolic (I think) for sin. Very interesting. The flow was perfect. Very easy to follow along and held my attention 'till the last word. The message was quite strong and "out there" and you even gave a "closed" ending. Still, no placings. Weird. Very good.