The Official Writing Challenge
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Exquisite! Fantastical! I have always loved the brightly lit colorful carnivals. The ending is beautiful. Thank you for taking me back to my childhood.
01/19/14
This does take us back to memories of childhood. Oh, to be a kid again!

I had a problem with the rhyming. Because the first two lines often rhymed, I expected the last two to rhyme, which threw me off on the flow of the poem. I know you meant for the 2nd & 4th to rhyme.

Nice message though! Great ending. Blessings, LaVonne
01/19/14
This reminds me so much of a picture I saw on Face-Book where upon the far turn, the horses were leaping from the carousel up into the heavens—the meaning matching the words of your poem. Someday us leaping from the endless circles this life takes us on, to the endless wonders of Heaven’s shores. Lovely poem, well done.
01/20/14
A musical and colourful picture of the fairground we all loved as children. The scene of the Carousel in the centre of things, circling round endlessly, fits the topic perfectly.
Exquisite imagery, and wonderful message and invitation to freedom in faith! Loved every word.
Congratulations on your EC, Jim, for a wonderfully inviting poem--made me want to ride on the carousel.