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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Endless (01/09/14)

TITLE: Neverending Nights-He Lives!
By lynn gipson
01/10/14


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Silent seconds tick by into minutes,

minutes pass as a stagnated wind,

endless hours are spent in agony,

solitude seemingly comes to no end.


Solitude seemingly comes to no end,

loneliness crawls without a timing,

echoes of trauma come without cease,

memories flash, soundless and miming.


Memories flash, soundless and miming,

yesterday calls a conscience to bear,

mournful minds cannot be released,

cerebral dreams mouths cannot share.


Cerebral dreams mouths cannot share,

spinning and turning, endless in sight,

complexities fill a deep blackest hole,

depression has come to sleep tonight.


Depression has come to sleep tonight,

sinking in mire all memories of joy,

bogging the mind in muddy waters,

rivers of ruin to come to drown and destroy.


Rivers of ruin to come to drown and destroy,

while breaths of the soul sing sweetly a song,

seek forgiveness for all dreadful deeds,

prayer brings the peace to right a wrong.


Prayer brings the peace to right a wrong,

each time an evil attempts to invade,

God shoulders every fretful feeling,

With endless grace His will is made.


With endless grace His will is made,

arms open wide and mercy mending,

rest in his hands with faith forever,

seek the refuge His spirit is lending.


Seek the refuge His spirit is lending,

hide in the shelter His presence gives,

echo these words in your heart tonight,

the endless Truth, He lives! He lives!



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Graham Insley 01/18/14
All the way from "minutes pass as a stagnated wind," to "the endless Truth, He lives! He lives!" there are some remarkable lines.

It's awesome to know that when "Depression has come to sleep tonight," we can "seek the refuge His spirit is lending."

A well crafted poem and a very memorable psalm.
Sheldon Bass 01/18/14
Hooray! Love this. I like the introduction to each quatrain repeated and embellished.

It grabbed me from the start and gripped me all the way through. Possibly because I'm so familiar with the subject matter from personal experiences. And know a smidgen of your story.

Bless you! I can see a definite improvement in your poetry!
Lillian Rhoades 01/18/14
So many beautiful metaphors and descriptive words in your poem. Each portrays a depth of emotion that captures the reader.

" minutes pass as a stagnated wind," - Love it!

The last stanza is a perfect finish for this emotion-packed
poem that is filled with pathos AND hope.

Superb job, Lynn!
CD Swanson 01/18/14
Simply fabulous, and extraordinary, line after line...emotion after emotion, powerful and riveting!

This entire entry completely blew me away. Amazing piece of work here...I felt this poem and it moved me more than I can express.

Congratulations on this magnificent masterpiece...and congratulations on "moving up to Masters" --you are beyond ready!

God bless you Lynn~
Noel Mitaxa 01/19/14
Insomnia is nrmally nothing to lose any sleep over, :-(, but you have crafted this poem very cleverly. Despite a strict format, there is a beautiful flow of thought, climaxing with a powerful declaration.
On the other hand, if you are having trouble sleeping, lie along the edge of the mattress - and you'll drop off in no time!!!!
Great work.
Jim McWhinnie 01/19/14
A powerfully emotive work enhanced by the well-woven structure. Resonated with both depth of heart and sterling craftsmanship.

Excellent, excellent, indeed.
Colin Swann01/20/14
Very impressed by your deeply spiritual musing poem about lonliness and depression in the night, but thankfully:-
'Heaviness may endure for a night but joy comes in the morning'.
Judith Gayle Smith01/20/14
Endless nights, endless hours, endless longings. You pulled out my heartstrings and played them so gently . . .
Danielle King 01/23/14
I'm last minute reading entries but I'm so glad I came across this one. This is totally compelling and draws the reader right inside the thoughts and feelings of the MC. Great for the topic, and in my book, well worthy of a top placing. (2 hours away - I said I was late!!!)
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/25/14
Wow what a powerful piece. I can totally relate and my heart ached for that person, but then...Jesus. And no more needs to be said. Hugs.