The Official Writing Challenge
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I love this delightful take on this nursery rhyme. You brought the characters to life and warmed the cockles of my heart.
12/12/13
Loved it! It was deep and the characters real, and it was fun to realize that it was based on a childhood rhyme.
12/13/13
Ah, very clever. It didn't click with me until the end, but then it's a long time since I recited, Jack Sprat could eat no fat. This is great for the topic. Loved it.
12/13/13
Maybe I'm a fat-head, but the end was a great rug-puller - I was 'lean'ing in a completely different direction. Thanks for the fun.
12/13/13
The ending caught me by complete surprise, and then had me grinning in delight, as I realized how artfully you had just brought the old nursery rhyme to life before my eyes! So clever and so well done!
12/16/13
Bravo! A masterful retelling. I better be on the lookout for your future entries. (smile)
12/16/13
Love this story!

One tiny bit of red ink: "The cacophony of silence hung between he and his wife." should be written ". . . him and his wife." Remember the rule: Temporarily remove the phrase "and his wife"; now how would you word it? HE is used as a subject, HIM is used as an object. After any preposition, it's always HIM.

However, that said, the entire story was a joy. Very clever! Many spouses could learn from Jack how to approach that dreaded question.

Thank you for a story that made me smile.
Charming! What a delightful take on my hubby and me - example, he eats the cake and I steal the frosting . . .
So I was not familiar with the nursery rhyme, which was obviously the key point here, but I DID enjoy reading the story! It was touching and addressed several key issues (honesty, fear of rejection, etc) in a humorous way. The dialogue was well-written. Loved it!
12/19/13
Congratulations, Ruth Ann. I was so pleased to see you placed high in both your level and the Editors' Choice. Your story deserves the judges' rating.
Joy! Congratulations on your well-deserved win!

Love & Hugs in, through and because of Jesus, the Christ,

Judi Hebrews 10:26-31 KJV
Happy Holydays, beware the holly daze . . .
12/19/13
Aw, this is adorable. Jack Sprat and his wife. Who'd have thought? Hearty congrats on your EC.
01/04/14
Adorably brilliant use of the topic.
I smiled all the way through once I realized where you were headed. Clever clever girl!