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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Wolf in Sheep's Clothing (11/21/13)

TITLE: Led Astray
By Leola Ogle
11/27/13


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He came like a friend, sweetly wooing
Lies flowing from his lips, gently soothing
Humble as a lamb, angel of light
Masking his identity, darkness of night

Captivating, scintillating, mesmerizing
Honey flowing from the serpentís tongue
Inviting, exciting, enticing, conniving
Promises of things to come

Sweet maiden fair, young man unaware
Dreams of future bright, filled with delight
A family and home, hers alone
A car, a career, so far yet so near

With beguiling words, a sharp-edged sword
Wore down her defenses, numbed his senses
Yielding her virtue, drugs he clung to
Angel of Light, darkness of night

Harmless yearning, charmingly alarming
Illusion, delusion, confusion
Innocence lost at a terrible cost
No gentle lamb, this wolf-like fiend

Stealing, sharp tooth and claws revealing
Innocence yielded to the lying sword wielded
Babes to the slaughter, our sons and daughters
Oh, Father! Hear the wail of this mother

Return the children from the land forbidden
Gone away, led astray into darkness from day
Oh, Father! Hear the cry of this mother
Return the children from the land forbidden


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Ellen Carr 11/29/13
What a powerful and moving poem about a topic of great relevance to many of us today. Very well written.
Verna Cole Mitchell 11/30/13
This very well written poem (love the internal rhyme) carries an important message.
Joe Moreland11/30/13
I just got done saying, on another entry, about how I don't usually make comments on poems, because I don't feel qualified. But here I go again. :)

You weave an incredible tapestry of words here. This piece is simply mesmerizing and I am in awe of your masterful use of language. And while I am hopelessly unqualified to make any suggestion to someone as skilled as yourself in creating poetry, there is one small thing that broke the spell for me, momentarily. The word "yet" in the last line of the third stanza. It seems to my untrained brain that that line might flow better if that word was just plucked out. But, I clearly do not know what I'm talking about, so please feel free to ignore that completely if it makes no sense at all.

Again, I cannot express enough how excellent ("yet" withstanding) I found this piece to be. Thanks for sharing.
Camille (C D) Swanson 12/02/13
Powerful!

God bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 12/09/13
Congratulations on ranking 7th in your level and 11 overall! The highest rankings can be found on the message boards.