The Official Writing Challenge
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11/22/13
Missing lines would never be noticed by a poetry lover (wanna be poet, I try) in this lovely story.

I think this is terrific!
11/23/13
I couldn't help but smile while I was reading this. It brought to me a longing for a different way of life. Isn't it ironic that the ease of our modern life has stolen from us, in many ways, the ability to appreciate what really and truly matters. Thanks for writing a poem that takes us back--or maybe even forward--to what really matters.
11/23/13
What a fun poem to read! It took me a little longer though with all the h's missing.

Yes, the third stanza needs a little work with rhyming and structure. Otherwise looks good.

Blessings, LaVonne
Beyond charming! What a romp! Thank you for the tickle . . .
11/24/13
This was quite masterful and a sheer delight!

God bless~
Well written story poem.

I like the length of the lines and the placement of rhyming words.

Easy to read and easy to follow even with accent.

(Do you write mostly poems of some kind?)
11/26/13
A master's poem of pleasant loam to take us home or help us roam. You've kept the creative edge sharp. Well done.
11/29/13
Congrats! God bless~