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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Like Living in a Goldfish Bowl (11/07/13)

TITLE: Make Like A Dolphin
By C D Swanson


The nursing home in which Nicole had been employed, was privately owned, and one of ten very successful facilities. The owners were hands-on, and very down-to-earth within the operations, and very approachable.They thought of her as the “daughter they never had” and she felt as if they were extended family.

One day, about ten years into Nicole’s employ, she was invited to their son’s wedding. The wedding took place at their enormous estate overlooking the Long Island Sound. She’d heard stories of how their mansion was one of the most exclusive, and most unique of all the houses on the shoreline. Not one to be impressed with materialistic components of life, Nicole never paid attention to the details of the house.

The wedding took place in June, and after the nuptials, only a handful of guests were asked to linger for additional festivities. She was one of the “chosen few.”

While the owners had a chef preparing their meals, Nicole decided to accept their offer of a swim in their pool. She changed into her two-piece bathing suit and headed to the pool.

Noticing the high diving board, she smiled, and thought she’d give it a try. After all, her dad had taught her to dive from a very young age, but she hadn’t done so in years, and so it would be a welcome challenge.

The “special” guests were somewhere inside, and she was all “alone.” She approached the steps surreptitiously, and within seconds, found herself on the diving board. The Olympic sized pool, with its turquoise water beckoned, daring her to jump. She heard the whispers of the water tempting her, seducing her. Just then, a hawk flew overhead startling her, and as a result, Nicole went plummeting into the pool.

Upon impact, her bathing suit top popped off. She was on the bottom of the pool panicking. She swam like a dolphin and went in search of her top. Thank goodness no one was around, or so she thought.

She thought she heard faint tapping, but chalked it up to having her ears filled with water. She kept looking for her top, and finally spotted it stuck in the filter at the far end of the pool. Wanting to get there quickly, she swam underwater, and upon reaching it, she pulled it free. Nicole speedily put it on, but not before the damage was done.

You see, this magnificent mansion boasted many amenities that were all equally outstanding. However, the pool was not only magnificent in its outward beauty, it held yet another exceptional component… it was designed and fashioned after an aquarium. The wedding guests were seated in an opulent family room, where the pool was akin to a giant fishbowl for all to see. So while people swam, it could be viewed from the sanctuary of their lavish surroundings. The tapping she'd heard were the guests trying to warn her of her "fishbowl appearance."

Needless to say, Nicole took a short cut across the lawn, and took another dive head first into her car…the tire tracks are still there to this day, or so it’s been told...

Note: “Based on a true story that took place twenty years ago. Humility, prayer, a crazy sense of humor, and the ability to laugh at oneself, ( another gift from God) helped the MC greatly…”

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lynn gipson 11/15/13
I LOVED this story. Your descriptions of the lovely home and pool were spot on, as if I were there. This is truly a "goldfish bowl" story come to life. I laughed and cringed at the same time at the ending. Yes, a sense of humor and a bit of humility goes a long way in a situation like this. Thanks for sharing this terrific slice of life. Excellent!
Dannie Hawley 11/15/13
You've done an excellent job pulling me in to your story. Your description and detail set up the scene and I could hardly wait to see the finish. I hadn't expected your ending; that's for sure! And, to think it's based on a true story! Oh my, but I'm glad I wasn't on either side of that glass. Thanks for sharing your fun piece.
PamFord Davis 11/16/13
Great story but such a terrible experience. How could the MC ever look her hosts in the eyes again? Swimming again would trigger flashbacks. Dear me; I cannot imagine her embarrassment! I may be sending you a congratulations message on Thursday!

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Jules St. Jermaine 11/16/13
What a good story with a most unusual twist. I wasn't expecting that result of her swim at all. Well written and very interesting. I would have been horrified!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/21/13
Oh dear! This is wonderful. I love your take on the topic and am glad time has had helped the MC look back with humor. Congratulations on ranking 8th in your level and 11 overall! (You can find the highest rankings on the message board.)
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