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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Winter (11/14/05)

TITLE: I moan as I drown in sorrow
By sharmila sanka
11/14/05


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It is a hunter that has no gender
It is never a mentor that gives one hope
It is nothing but the chilly WINTER
That is a center not for ease but disease.

It is an icy dicey road where
Snow is skating on ice
Making Alice to slide with endless
Tears dripping from her eyes.

Am I the only being in the world
Rowing in infinite sorrow?
My hands ache and sob
To wipe tear by tear.

I am a lonely girl of birth
With no hope of mirth
Love is my only dearth
Death is my only search

AS

Water oozed like ocean into our homes
Seizing the lives of my kith and kin
My mom prayed to the Christ and
Gave up her life to give me life.

BECAUSE

There came a hurricane
That left me in great pain
It hurried my mom to die and
Me to cry with a life dry.

I now see many tiny feet
Bare with heat of love and care
We all need a rush of magical hugs
To relieve us from the gush of grief.


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J. C. Lamont11/21/05
The melodramtic title made me click on this to read. I especially loved the first and third verses.
Nina Phillips11/22/05
I wonder if you are comparing winter to death-as in the hunter with no gender. Thank you for sharing your heart. Well said--God bless ya, littlelight
Sandra Petersen 11/22/05
Wow! This poem has a lot of meat that needs to be chewed on over time. So much meaning in 7 stanzas! My favorite stanzas were 3, 5, and 7, and especially the line "a rush of magical hugs to relieve us from the gush of grief."
Tisha Martin11/27/05
Powerful poem, gripping title. I would suggest to draw out the 'plot.' I know nothing about writing poems so I'm not sure how you would do that. =) I liked the stanza about the mother dying to give birth. Wow.