The Official Writing Challenge
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Hahahaha! You just gave me a big old smile and a belly laugh to boot. This is one of your best yet, my friend. It is a BIG winner in my book. Kept me reading with great interest of what Mr. Mercenary was gonna say next all through the story, and the ending was hilarious! This is a real smile (and laugh) bringer...Thanks for making my day.
I visualized your characters.
There was a stark contrast....
positive and patient
negative and rude

I especially liked your ending!

Wing His Words
I really enjoyed your story. Giving Mr Mercenary that name added a layer to the picture you painted of his character. Great ending too!
A good fun read, with great characters and a clever build up to the surprise close.
I know several Johnny Mercenary types who are so good at tracking down evil behaviour and evil people that maybe they should start their own abomination (or should that be called a demon-itation?) and call it the Sleutheran Church.
Well done.
What a delightful read! I'm still laughing, as I try to write. Your title intrigued me, your characters hooked me, and your ending finished me off. I laughed so loudly, folks in the house asked me what'd happened. Great job! Terrific message delivered in a hilarious piece.
I liked your witty contrast in characters. I could just picture Mr. Mercenary trying to stir up trouble. Great read and a winner in my book.
Oh, I loved this, especially the last bit. Nice ending. :)
Most excellent and enjoyable!
Great story, great characters and a surprise, fun ending. You've got it all. Loved it!
Great story, loved the ending!
Congrats on your well-deserved E.C.! This is such a fun story; I'm delighted to see it on the Editors list. Pass the chocolate and let's celebrate!
Congratulations, Camille; enjoy the spotlight!

Wing His Words
Camille, I'm so happy for you. I really enjoyed your story. Congratulations on your well deserved win.
I really loved your story--perfectly suited to EC!--A spiritual message presented with grace and humor.
Loved the story and especially the surprise ending. Way to go.
Oh this was so cute and creatively executed. Especially loved the surprise ending! Thanks for a BIG smile.