The Official Writing Challenge
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10/27/13
I was smiling at the images you've created so well. This was an interesting and attention getting story that led to an important conclusion. Nicely done, and certainly on topic!

Thanks. God bless~
This is a hoot. You created a great mental picture for me. I loved the mom... Reminded me of what I might have said to my kids. :)

I'm not sure you needed as much backstory as you gave in the beginning. You do such a wonderful job of showing the reader your story that the background information slowed the pacing.

Overall, you did a great job. Your sense of humor reminds me of Noel Mixta (if you haven't read his stories, check them out. That is a great compliment as Noel is FW's master punnist.) The message is a great one too. I really enjoyed the POV of the "brat." Good job.
Hmmm.... I loved it,precious!!!

Thank you and God bless you!!!