The Official Writing Challenge
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10/21/13
This was a pleasant read. I really enjoyed the entire piece.

Good job.

God bless~
10/21/13
With a little polishing, this would make a fun children's book. It would help if you identified them as mouse and cat in the first paragraph. I thought Mercurio was a cat until I got farther into the story, and then I had to go back and read it again.
I loved all the action.
Keep writing.
Oh I love this! What a delightful story. You did a wonderful job of developing the characters. It's also a great take on the topic. A delightful read.