The Official Writing Challenge
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Good job. I figured out where you were heading about halfway through. I love the take on the topic, very original! I thought you used a few too many adjectives in the beginning, it slowed me down.
11/17/05
I figured out where you were going, but I was very curious about how you were going to get there. This is brilliantly crafted - cunning and intriguing!
Cleverly crafted. Great punch line at the end!
11/20/05
Suckered me right in. Well done.
11/23/05
Wow!!!!!!

I didn't figure out where you were going until the end. I was totally in there!

You used some excellent descriptions, and you also highlighted what true beauty is not.

Well done!!!