The Official Writing Challenge
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10/10/13
This was an interesting and thought provoking read. I liked the "open-ended" conclusion. Nicely done.

God bless~
I enjoyed the colorful dialogue.

The open ended conclusion left me somewhat mystified.

I like the way that almost the entire store is told using dialogue.
Nicely told with a believable aura. The MC is a work in process and the conclusion reflects that. Well done
10/14/13
Interesting story. They were all willing to give him another chance, but the ending left me wondering what would happen next. If this is the beginning of a book, I would love to read the next chapter.

Very emtionally engaging. I wonder if any were praying for him? A loner remains a loner if he feels there is no one on his side . . .