The Official Writing Challenge
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09/08/13
You have a great message in your entry. It is well written, but I felt a bit preached at when I read it. I'm sure that wasn't your intention at all.

Thanks for sharing
09/09/13
I loved this entire message. It was well written and powerful in its execution, and certainly on topic.

Thank you for this precise to the point devotional.

God bless~
09/12/13
Congrats! God Bless~
Congratulations for ranking 5th in your level and 20 overall! (The highest rankings can be found on the message boards)
This is a beautiful devotion. I really liked the story in the beginning. It drew me in and I was eager to read more.

The only red ink I might offer would be to include a prayer. I like prayers in devotions and in this case it would be a perfect fit. Many people have no ideas how to pray and seeing it written out helps.

I think you also had a strong ending. Many people struggle with an ending, but yours wrapped up your message quite nicely. I also think you nailed the topic. It's a fresh and fascinating take on the topic. This piece will make people stop and think. Good job!