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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Expose (08/22/13)

TITLE: Talking with Jesus
By Ellen Carr
08/28/13


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Lord Jesus,

Must you
expose my cracks
my many lacks
my covered tracks
my knives in backs?

Will you
lay me bare
face me square
ignore my glare
and nothing spare?

Can I
confess my sin
drown out the din
your mercy win
new life begin?

My child, I
wait for you
am weeping too
died in lieu
can make you new.

Dear one
you must come
I cast off none
the work is done
the victory's won.

I will
no sins expose
I cover those
from death I rose
your case to close.

You'll be
completely free
sin cast on me
my family
eternally.


Lord I
give my heart
make new start
follow your chart
will not depart.

I will
live in hope
more than cope
on life's tightrope
and slippery slope.


I'll know
fear decrease
guilt release
joy increase
inner peace.

At last
finished quest
new life accessed
richly blessed
there's spirit rest.



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Mike Newman 09/02/13
I'm not qualified to critique poetry, because I know not of what I speak :), but I enjoyed it.

Thank you for sharing it.
Joanne Sher 09/02/13
So powerful and "punchy." In all honesty, not crazy about the title, but I have no suggestions for you - and it could be me.
Judith Gayle Smith09/02/13
Great message - interesting interaction. Good use of rhyming words . . .
Noel Mitaxa 09/02/13
This exposes us to the contrast between our own hesitance to ask for forgiveness and Jesus' desire to grant it - all in such simple terms. Great work.
Bea Edwards 09/03/13
I really enjoyed your poem. It flowed along effortlessly and your first stanza was completely convicting.
Brenda Rice 09/03/13
I do not critique poetry, but I know what I like and I like it.

Tremendous message. Thanks for sharing.
lynn gipson 09/03/13
Loved it! You make rhyming come so easily. Enjoyed this conversation with Jesus immensely. Very well done.
CD Swanson 09/04/13
Simply beautiful! Wow.

God bless~