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Topic: Exhale (08/15/13)
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TITLE: From Bad to Verse... | Previous Challenge Entry
By Noel Mitaxa
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ADD TO MY FAVORITES
Readers found it hard to understand.
They told me this was so,
And I replied, “Yes I know,
But I’ve noticed lately as I approach the end of a verse that I feel overtaken by some kind of a compulsion to try to squeeze as many words into the last line as I possibly can!”
I thought -
As I ought!
Maybe simpler rhyming and rhythm
Would get me on better terms with ’em.
So I tried a simpler poem.
Hoping that would show ’em
That my verse-making skill
Might yet give them a thrill.
But it was far from easy,
For my stomach was queasy
And my mind was seething
With the poem’s need for neat breathing
For I discovered that poetry aficionados
How to rhyme with that word – who knows?
Enjoy clear punctuation
To enhance their imagination.
To make word-pictures flow,
Allowing images to grow
Within their mind
I find
The going tough
And more than enough -
Of a challenge.
For any readers who saw me working;
In my neighbourhood lurking;
Then, becoming bolder,
Looked over my shoulder
And asked about this confusing stanza…
I could offer no anza.
My verse
Has got worse
I’ve reached the time -
Far from sublime –
To stop holding my breath –
As this rhyme reaches its death -
In hope of finding depth and meaning.
No, my mind has gone stale,
I cannot prevail.
It’s time to exhale.
Author's note: I've suffered for my humour, and now it's your turn to suffer...
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Excellent and so much fun.
Great job...God bless~
You did a wonderful job, thanks for sharing it.
You should stick to prose,
But I have read verse,
Which is marginally worse!
You made me laugh!
You should stick to your prose,
But I have read some other verse,
Which is marginally worse!
(You made me laugh!)
(A correction of my previous comment!)
God bless~
I can relate
"From Bad to Verse"
has cracked the slate
But wait! Did I say I relate?
In every way. Congratulations.
Listen brother,
Bad verse good,
Understood?
More from you,
Next week will do.
Do your worst,
You might come first!
Ha-Ha-Ha
Ho-Ho-Hoo
A jolly big fat
CONGRATS to you!
That is cool, yes that is great.
Hone your versing skills a bit,
And you'll have a number one hit.
Congratulations!
So happy for you, this deserved a win, it was so cute, clever and downright funny!