The Official Writing Challenge
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Oh my goodness! This punched me in the gut...Wow.

You told the story with conviction and it resonated truths. Excellent piece.

God bless~
So tormenting to think of the price of war especially on the children.

You did an outstanding job with the topic as well as with the tension of the piece.

I was on the edge of my seat.

Beautifully done, although a harsh subject. Good on you.
Simply marvelous, and by far one of my favorites this week.

God Bless~
Wow, this is riveting. It packs a powerful punch. A very different, thought provoking take on the topic, which you nailed. Congrats on your EC.
'And while the world lazed about, stuck in its own cares and concerns.' This entire piece is really hard hitting. Congratulations on your EC win with this powerful piece.
This story gripped me with the ugly reality of war that it conveyed from start to finish. I felt the fear of the child, the angst of the medic, and heard the bullets whizzing by as the story progressed to its sad conclusion. I think we all wonder from time to time "when is God going to say--Enough!"
Sorry--I meant to include my congratulations on taking 9th place with this remarkable entry.
Thanks for the congrats, everyone! I was thrilled to open up the page and see my ranking. I appreciate the encouragement and advice I have received, and can only hope to keep improving! God bless.
Congratulations Sarah, on your well deserved EC win!! Wow—your vivid descriptions brought the scene alive before my eyes, I felt like I was watching it and sharing the MC’s thoughts on war! I actually felt myself exhaling with the child at the tragic end. Terrific job on this!
Magnificent treatise on the realities experienced by the unknown heroes behind the scenes and the atrocities suffered by the causalities.
Sarah, this was such an incredible story. I was drawn in from the first sentence, as you chose to jump right into the action.

War is such an ugly activity. I use "activity" for lack of a better word. There are those in the world who actually covet it as such; an activity to generate wealth. All too often, the innocent are the casualties. I'm thinking of Syria, as I write this. Tragic.

Back on topic, you used a brilliant landscape to incorporate the theme of exhale. Well done ma'am.