The Official Writing Challenge
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08/22/13
Such a good story! I loved the ending, and the truth of "accepting Jesus" so we may live forever more.

Thanks. God bless~
08/22/13
Your story feels true and the emotions between friends feels real. You captured the spirit of the situation well. Your message is heard loud and clear.

Thanks.
08/23/13
Very well done, with an excellent sense of time and place.
08/29/13
Congrats! God bless~
WOW! You had me holding my breath! I can't even begin to tell you how invested I was into this story. I felt like I was right there and what would be unfamiliar scenery to my eyes was vivid and clear. The beginning may have felt a tiny bit slow to me. I might have started off with the rearing and bucking and snake bite, but that's just my opinion. Overall you did an outstanding job! The dialog felt natural and you were really able to do a great job of building the characters in only 750 words. Congratulations and Happy Dance! (This is one of my favorites for sure)
Congratulations for ranking 20 overall!
09/02/13
Loved your tale Graham!