The Official Writing Challenge
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08/15/13
Oh, I absolutely loved this! Sometimes I will see a poem and think, “I wish I had written this”…well this is one of those! Lovely, peaceful views that stir hope and longing within! Excellent job!
08/18/13
You described an exotic place I would love to go to. Beautiful glimpse into our heavenly future.
I liked how you packed so much into each short phrase. The beauty of poetry is being able to express much with few words. I did find myself editing the second to last line just a bit. I wanted to change "To you like him..." to "To you--like him--..." Seems like a pause there helps to make the thought more personal. Very good job!
08/20/13
Beautiful... and the line that spoke to me, "God's promises are true." Amen.

God bless~
Lovely, warm, and wonderful message. A poem that goes straight to the heart.