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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Expire (08/01/13)

TITLE: Old MacDonald
By Melanie Kerr


Old Macdonald had a farm
E, I, E, I, O
And on that farm he had a field
E, I, E, I, O
With a row of carrots here and
Some green beans there
And asparagus here
And some parsnips there
And broccoli here and
The some cabbages there
And a green house in the sunshine
And some rhubarb in the shade
Old MacDonald had a farm
E, I, E, I, O

Old Macdonald had a barn
E, I, E, I, O
And in that barn he stored his harvest
E, I, E, I, O
With some bags of tatties here and
A box of turnips there
A pile of onions here
And some beetroot there
Some broad beans here
And the radishes there
And stem of sprouts here
And no room to put the other stuff
Old MacDonald had a barn
E, I, E, I, O

Old Macdonald had a problem
E, I, E, I, O
And he scratched his head for a very long time
E, I, E, I, O
He moved a box here
And he moved a sack there
He stacked his sprouts here
With his onions on the top
And he froze his broad beans
And put them in the freezer
And he ate lots of salad
But it didnít make much difference
Old Macdonald still had a problem
E, I, E, I, O

Old Macdonald had an idea
E, I, E, I, O
He measured up blueprint for a bigger barn
E, I, E, I, O
A lot of wood here and
A pile of nails there
A pencil mark here
And saw, saw there
A bang of hammer here
And a sore thumb there
A lick of red paint and
A sigh of satisfaction
Old Macdonald filled his new barn
E, I, E, I, O

Old Macdonald heard from God
Letís miss out the E, I, E, I,
And swiftly move on to O
God called him a fool
His life was now demanded
With a cough, cough here
And a wheeze, wheeze there
A falling over here
And a last gasp there
Old MacDonald died that night
E, I, E, I, O

Old Macdonald was a fool
E, I, E, I, O
He had nothing stored in heaven
E, I, E, I, O
The carrots over here
And the tatties over there
The onions in their pile
And the broad beans in the freezer
Weren't shared with the neighbours
Or the widows and the orphans
Or the poor and the needy
He just built a bigger barn
And no one ate the cabbages
Old MacDonald Ė what a fool!
E, I, E, I, O

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Judith Gayle Smith08/09/13
Fun to read, and deadly serious. A delightful twist to a dramatic parable . . .
lynn gipson 08/09/13
Very Good! And most original work.
Linda Goergen08/09/13
Undeniably a very clever and unique take on both the topic and the parable in Luke 12: 16-20! Seems an amusing and lighthearted read until the sobering end hits you. I think every time I hear the "Old MacDonald" song from now on, I will think of this poem! Excellent job on this!!!
Pastor QT Nyathi08/10/13
Brilliant poem. What an amazing way to adapt the song. As a begginer entrant, I now understand why there is a masters class afterall!
C D Swanson 08/10/13
This was very different. And made me smile.

God bless~
Danielle King 08/12/13
This tickled me pink! It has a serious message and an hilarious presentation. (I'm still laughing.) And it was certainly unique. What more could I say?
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 08/13/13
This is wonderful. I love the sardonic sense of humor and the powerful message at the end.
Margaret Kearley 08/14/13
Wonderful, inventive, and very thought-provoking. Just great!
Bea Edwards 08/14/13
Oh what a marvelous way to illustrate this lesson! Well done.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 08/16/13
Congratulations for ranking 27 overall!
Noel Mitaxa 08/27/13
Much food for thought - right through to the climax. Clever parallels to Jesus' parable (a parallelable???)