The Official Writing Challenge
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What a touching story. I loved it. Strait from a child's heart.
07/19/13
So sweet, right on topic and the voice is so authentic. This made me smile. Great job.
07/20/13
Loved the kid's language, especially the "akshully". This is a big issue to deal with. There are so many broken homes today! You alluded to the way Jesus had made a difference in the father, but I feel that point could be just a bit stronger. I wish this piece was longer, and I hope you'll add to the story. You have a good idea here. Good work.
07/23/13
Good job, I really liked the story and the authentic voices. God Bless~