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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Expect (07/11/13)

TITLE: The Unbearable Dream
By Verna Cole Mitchell


Darkness poured over me in folds of velvet,
Binding me as tightly as the strongest ropes of hemp.
I could see nothing around me, and all I could hear
Was the steady beating of my heart
With its pounding repetition: Steven, Steven, Steven,
The name I had lovingly spoken to my unborn son
As he nestled in the warmth of my womb.
He had been snatched away before he could take a breath.
Never would he share with me his little smiles,
Nor would I hold him when he cried
And watch him take his first faltering step.
The many dreams Iíd had for him
And my joyous expectations for his future
Would not now ever come to pass.
I knew my husband was nearby,
Immersed in grief all his own,
But I could not feel his touch
For the oppressive blackness that restrained me.
All hope was gone.

I half awoke from the unbearable dream,
Still weighted down with a heavy burden of sadness.
I felt I had become sister to all mothers of unborn babies.
Before even I opened my eyes, a ray of golden light grew
Until it shone in an aura of glory all around me.
I saw my little son in the company of God and the angels,
Playing happily with other unborn babies
That had preceded him to that holy place.
I began to feel the constraints that had bound me
Ease away as I anticipated that day
When I would see my once expected child again
In heavenís playground, and I imagined him there,
Running to meet me and jumping into my arms.

Once fully awake, I found my hope restored
In the comfort that God offers for every expectant mother
Who has suffered such a grievous loss.

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Pauline Brakebill 07/18/13
What a beautiful rendition of a heart reending experience. Only a mother who haad experienced such a lose could write this piece. Beautiful!
Pauline Brakebill 07/18/13
What a beautiful rendition of a heart rending experience. Only a mother who had experienced such a lose could write this piece. Beautiful!
Yvonne Blake 07/18/13
So sad - I could feel the pain and loss, and then the hope of seeing the baby again.
Leola Ogle 07/18/13
So poignant, brought tears to my eyes. Only someone who has suffered such a loss can understand. A powerful entry. God bless!
Tracy Nunes 07/19/13
Beautifully said. Well done!
Ellen Carr 07/19/13
Thanks for you very moving writing and its message of hope at the end. You express well what must be the experience of many. Well done.
Noel Mitaxa 07/22/13
What a poignant commentary on the loss of what might have been - on a human level - yet you lift it into the mystery of a promise beyond measure and beyond words. Beautiful work.
CD (Camille) Swanson 07/24/13
This was deeply sobering and yet uplifting in the hope and joy for the MC knowing she'd be seeing her child again in the future.

This sounds like an authentic story because the pain was palpable in your words. If so, my deepest, and most sincere condolences on your overwhelming and significant loss. Thank you for sharing with us.

May God bless you abundantly~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 07/27/13
Congratulations on 22 overall!!