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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Expect (07/11/13)

TITLE: The Long Awaited One
By Pauline Brakebill
07/12/13


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July 11, 2013


The Long awaited one;
Joel and Abigail sat quietly on the old gnarled bench underneath the window of their mother’s room. Each one had a distinctly different picture in their mind of the individual that was to enter their lives shortly. Just who was this person, and why was he coming to see them?

Joel thought of this man as a tall person with dark wavy hair and squinty eyes. Joel was sure he would never smile and he probably would not let them do any thing. The man might even lock the two children in the bedroom and never let them out. They would probably only get bread and water for their meals. Just think, the scroll would read “Two little kids are tortured by big Philistine.” Joel’s mind went zooming as his imagination conjured up all kinds of scenes that might occur in his life as this stranger arrived at their home.

Abigail also pictured the man that was to arrive any time now. Abigail’s young mind envisioned a jolly round man, sort of like a palace clown. He would be smiling all the time and give them surprises every day. Lamb tidbits and candy would be the daily routine. Her vision of the man became more exciting as her imagination took over. What a joyful time we will have!

Kneeling on the bench, the two children put their hands on the window sill - their chins’ resting on their fingers. “ Do you think he will come soon?” asked Abigail. “Will he be as wonderful as Father said he was?”

“I think he will come and be mean to us. Father didn’t know him very well , He told Father that he could heal the sick and give comfort to the homeless. That is why he’s coming here. I don’t believe that he can do anything about Mother’s illness. She is too sick. I’m afraid He might make her die. He will be here soon, so we will see who is right.”

It wasn’t very long after the children told about their thoughts of the stranger, that they heard the sound of hoofs. Hurrying to the door, they saw a big cloud of dust. “That must be Father and the stranger,” danced Abigail excitedly. “Let’s go out and meet them.”

“Don’t be so sure that you want to meet Him,” snarled Joel . “He might just hit you and knock you down.”

“Oh Joel, you are so wrong. Don’t have such mean thoughts. You get all the bad ideas from those friends you play with. You need to find new boys to come to our house and play.” Abigail pleaded for Joel to stay away from those big guys.

At that moment, Father and the stranger came swiftly into the room where Joel and Abigail’s mother lay on the crooked old bed. She had been crying as she thought about what her children would do after she died.

The stranger, dressed in pure white linen, took Mother’s hand, gently rubbing it . His hands were so strong, but yet soft and white. The stranger’s face shone like the sun and He had a smile that melted the heart of both Joel and Abigail. Never had they seen anyone like this man before.

As He spoke to Mother, the words felt so warm and kind, “Rise up my child and prepare supper for your family.” Immediately , Mother rose up, smiling, and went out to prepare their meal.

Standing with their mouths wide open, Joel and Abigail could not say a word. The picture of Jesus which each had in their hearts’ was not what He truly was.

What do you expect to see when you meet Jesus? The Bible gives us a true picture of Him. To know Him is to love Him. Would you let Him in if He were to walk by your door today?


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Leola Ogle 07/18/13
Ah, love this entry. I love how Joel's and Abigail's expectations were so different. Good job! God bless!
harvestgal Ndaguba07/18/13
All I can say is "Awesome!"
Tracy Nunes 07/19/13
Isn't it true that we all "paint" Him with a different brush, sometimes in our own image? Thankfully, He's much better than anything we can imagine.
Noel Mitaxa 07/22/13
An imaginative challenge to all our expectations, wraped in a very clever narrative.
CD Swanson 07/24/13
Powerful piece that made me sit up and read with avid interest. Very well done.

God bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 07/27/13
Congratulations on ranking 23 overall!!