The Official Writing Challenge
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I enjoyed the dialog. The story is timeless. When will there be an end to marital violence? It's hard to write local dialog, but you did good. Thanks.
Music helps so much. Thank you for sharing:)
You did a really nice job of building this character. I could easily picture sitting there next to him listening. I did struggle with trying to follow the story because of the accent. It gives the MC a lot of character, but next time you may want to consider possibly having a narrator to break it up a bit. You did tell a powerful story though and once I did get through it all, I was so touched by the MC. He is a very likable character. Congratulations for placing 3 in your level and 20 overall!