The Official Writing Challenge
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Good descriptive writing. I liked the way you used the boy's actions-kicking clods, thumping berries, taking a short-cut...to portray his character. Your title also goes well with this boy--sounds like a few boys I know! One suggestion: in the pargraph where the boy is coming home and sees his dad in the yard working you tell us he approached. I don't think you really needed to tell the reader that he approached. You were doing a good job showing his approach, telling us that he approached somehow just doesn't fit. Like the dialogue too--very realistic.
06/08/13
Delightful slice of life piece. Enjoyed all the details.
06/13/13
This was piece held my attention from beginning to end. It had action, adventure, and numerous moments that spelled out
L I F E...Great job.

God bless~