The Official Writing Challenge
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11/14/05
A good visual with a poetic flow. This would have been a lot better without any mention of Rosie, as no 15 yr. old would talk like this.
I enjoyed your careful descriptions in this story.
11/19/05
Some dialog roadblocks here; I agree a 15yr. old probably is not in this picture. Keep writing,with work this will get there.
11/19/05
A 15 year old? Hardly. .. and the Title? Shouldn't it be WHO does God look like?...or What does God look like? Needs a little more work.