The Official Writing Challenge
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Beautiful story with very realistic dialogue. I enjoyed this. Thank you.

God bless~
I really enjoyed this story. Though I don't have grandchildren yet, I know the fact that they don't live next door will bother me so I could so relate to your MC. I love how God gives us just what we need to get through the hard times. Your story definitely showed that.
This is a good story, on topic, and with a message. I could feel the needs of the MC and the answer that came through Smoke Dog. Good job.
Oh, besides the fact that this is just excellent writing with all your "showing" and not telling, I loved this because my son is Native American and stories like this stir my soul. Absolutely lovely! I can learn a lot from reading your writing.
Oh, this is great.

The sentences in the first paragraph felt a bit long to me. I think I might have made them into several smaller sentences.

Nice job with this. I too enjoy Native American stories.
I loved the essence of this story of needs being met for both the dog and man because of their circumstances in life.
Congrats Sheldon! God bless~
Congratulations on your HC!
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