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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Whine (05/23/13)

TITLE: Conquering EntitleMentality
By Tim Pickl


“Honey, your old Macintosh is making that sound again!”

“What did you say?” Maria stepped out of the laundry area, located just off the kitchen. “The washer and dryer are so loud I can’t hear you.”

“Your old Macintosh is whining again. I think Annabelle has used it so much the hard disk drive is goin’.”

As if on cue, Annabelle shuffled into the kitchen. “Daddy, come an’ look. I think my ‘puter is dead.”

“Attention! Attention! Antichrist Antivirus Perception Police, report to the gathering area.” Within a fraction of a second, the A-APP reported as ordered to the Commander-in-A-APP-Chief.

“It looks like we have another busy Saturday on the docket today for the Johnson family. A new stream of antichrist virus thoughts has managed to sneak past the perimeters of the Johnson minds overnight; but we are well equipped as both Ross and Marcia have been praying this week!”

“What kind of threat are we facing today, Sir?”

“Today the Johnson family is facing the strongest spirit that’s invaded the world and is attacking My Church today: entitlement.”

“See, look-it, Daddy, my ‘puter died again.”

Sure enough, the old Macintosh desktop display was frozen, but the obnoxious whine remained. A large smiley face on the screen mocked Ross as he reached to power it off.

“Wait, Daddy, wait!”

“Why? This is how—”

“Cuz I was playin’ MY fav-rit game!” Annabelle’s whiney voice matched the pitch of the Macintosh.

“But, honey… the only way to fix it is to restart it.”

“Awwwwww, puhleez, Daddy? Don’t turn MY ‘puter off.”

“But, Annabelle, honey-bear, I need to turn it off.”

“Here it comes! Entitlement antichrist thoughts at 3 o’clock.”

“Roger that. Weapons at the ready.”

“Please Daddy, puhleez? This is MY computer. You gave it to ME.” Annabelle stuck out her bottom lip, crossed her arms and stomped the floor with her left foot emphasizing almost every syllable. “You promised you would get me a new ‘puter. Remember?”


“Firing antichrist antivirus weapons, Sir.”

“Honey, let’s talk about this.”

“No! I don’t wanna.”

“Another attack! Entitlement reinforcement antichrist thoughts at 9 o’clock.”

“We see them, Sir.”


“Firing second round of antichrist antivirus weapons, Sir.”

“Don’t shut off my ‘puter.” Annabelle went to the corner of her room and plopped down in a huff. Thankfully, she stopped whining.

Ross quietly prayed, “Dear Lord, I need Your help with this situation, right now.”

“Another attack! Entitlement reinforcement antichrist thoughts at 6 o’clock.”

“We’re on it, Sir.”


“Firing third round of antichrist antivirus weapons, Sir… Got ‘em! We've captured them all!”

“Annabelle, go hug your Father, now, and tell him you are sorry.”

“Oh, all right, Mommy.” Annabelle ran to Ross and hugged him tightly. “I’m sorry, Daddy. I just want my ‘puter to work.”

With one finger, Ross gently lifted Annabelle’s head by the chin and said, “I love you, honey-bear. We love you. We want the best for you and we’ll do anything and everything in our power to give you the best things.”

“I know. Thank you.”

“Now, that’s the Spirit. We need to be thankful for the things we have; and we need to be thankful for the people in our lives.”

“Thank you Daddy.”

“Every good thing we have is a gift from God: We are not entitled to anything.” The solution came to Ross as God answered his prayer. He hit a couple of keys and Annabelle’s game resumed. “See? God answers prayer.”

“I love you, Daddy. I love you, Mommy.”

“Mission Accomplished.”

“Excellent job.”

“What should we do with all the captured antichrist thoughts?”

“Demolish them all.”


Reference: 2 Corinthians 10:1-6 (Holman Christian Standard Bible—HCSB)
Now I, Paul, make a personal appeal to you by the gentleness and graciousness of Christ—I who am humble among you in person but bold toward you when absent. I beg you that when I am present I will not need to be bold with the confidence by which I plan to challenge certain people who think we are behaving in an unspiritual way. For though we live in the body, we do not wage war in an unspiritual way, since the weapons of our warfare are not worldly, but are powerful through God for the demolition of strongholds. We demolish arguments and every high-minded thing that is raised up against the knowledge of God, taking every thought captive to obey Christ. And we are ready to punish any disobedience, once your obedience has been confirmed.

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C D Swanson 05/30/13
Interesting approach this multi-layered piece. Nicely done with a very good message.

God bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/30/13
Oh I love this! I think you did an excellent job of developing the conflict and building the characters. So many parents think that by giving their kids everything they are doing them a favor, but instead we have a whole generation of instant gratification all about me people out there. Your message is a great one and hopefully some parents will see the dangers into giving kids everything because of your fabulous story.
Sheldon Bass 05/31/13
That 2 Cor 10 passage is one of my mantras—sooo powerful! I loved the creativity here in your piece and your usage of "whine". Unfortunately, it sounded like you were describing my dinosaur of a computer—LOL.
I haven't yet figured out all your abbreviations, as I'm not 100% savvy on that, but coming along. The message is excellent and vitally needed today. Good work.
C D Swanson 06/06/13
Congrats. God Bless~
Linda Berg 06/06/13
Congratulations on your win. Good message about the whining entitlement mentality we probably all struggle with at times.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 06/06/13
Congratulations for ranking 3 in your level and 15 overall! (The highest rankings can be found on the message boards)