The Official Writing Challenge
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Interesting approach this multi-layered piece. Nicely done with a very good message.

God bless~
Oh I love this! I think you did an excellent job of developing the conflict and building the characters. So many parents think that by giving their kids everything they are doing them a favor, but instead we have a whole generation of instant gratification all about me people out there. Your message is a great one and hopefully some parents will see the dangers into giving kids everything because of your fabulous story.
That 2 Cor 10 passage is one of my mantras—sooo powerful! I loved the creativity here in your piece and your usage of "whine". Unfortunately, it sounded like you were describing my dinosaur of a computer—LOL.
I haven't yet figured out all your abbreviations, as I'm not 100% savvy on that, but coming along. The message is excellent and vitally needed today. Good work.
Congrats. God Bless~
Congratulations on your win. Good message about the whining entitlement mentality we probably all struggle with at times.
Congratulations for ranking 3 in your level and 15 overall! (The highest rankings can be found on the message boards)