The Official Writing Challenge
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11/15/05
What a beautiful story and well written:)
11/15/05
A touching and beautiful story. Watch the affirmations, they seemed a bit much, work toward more beats in the dialog.
You've captured what I believe to be true...beauty is most obvious in the elderly who have walked with God. This might be easier to read if there were obvious paragraph spacings throughout. Good job!