The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 357 times
Member Comments
Ingenious. Loved your characters and smiled all the way through this. Thanks for sharing this original and unique take on the topic!

BLessings, Lynn
This story was certainly not lacking on characters...Nice job with the subject/topic, and an interesting ending.

God bless~
A real western cowboy tale, with wonderful, realistic dialogue and suspense.

"As grease blinded..." does keep the topic in mind, but I would suggest: "As sweat blinded..."

I loved how the story ended with good overcoming the bad.
It is so true - bacon and waffles do go wonderfully together!

Your characters are so delightfully imaginative!

Have a blessed Mother's Day . . .
I loved your story. You painted an interesting scene. I really liked the ending. At the beginning you talked about a machine gun, based on the rest of the story, I wondered if that was out of place. Would machine guns be in the Wild West? I could be wrong. I'm glad waffle got to talk about the maker instead of meeting him.
You crafted a grand tale. There is another similar word play story with a Ness-ish twist. Enjoyed both of these creative clever entries immensely.
Congratulations on ranking 2 in your level and 21 overall!