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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Sizzle (05/02/13)

TITLE: Look'n for Sparks
By dub W
05/06/13


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I licked soot off my lips and tried to squint through the fog. A tip sheet told me Vince “No Good” Sparks was out there, somewhere. I’m Coal Sizzle, private eye. Two years ago I was a major case cop with the force, but I got fired cause there was an accusation of receiving hot merchandise from Sparks. I plan to light a fire under his sorry tail and see if he will admit to the set up without his usual stream of lies watering down the info.

My girl, Pepper, is making dinner for me. She’s probably smoldering about my tardiness. I met Pepper when I busted her mother, Arson Annie. I caught Annie torching a dumpster. She’s doing twenty in the desert. Anyway, Pepper burned a trail to my office after the bust. I managed to cool her down. I’ve carried a torch for her ever since, but we’ve had an explosive relationship. She introduced me to Sparks. Said he had some hot deals on engagement rings.

I moved cautiously along the wharf. I wasn’t going to let the fog dampen my attempt to grill Sparks.

“I could smell you coming.” I turned quickly to see Sparks light a cigarette. His silhouette burned though the moisture.

He stepped back as I replied, “Sparks. I was hoping to blaze a path to your door. Now here you are ready to be smoked.”

“You’re all wet, Sizzle.” He reached a hand to his side and a cloud of steam nearly knocked me over.

When I recovered I discerned no movement in the fog; Sparks was gone. Only a trail of ashes headed toward the docks.

I scorched a path to Pepper's flat. My guess was right. She was inflamed. When I opened the door a plate of hot buns crashed against the door jam. She was fried. “Pepper, cool down, I was hot on the trail of Sparks.”

Another bun bounced off the wall. “You’re a wash out Sizzle. Sparks has been dangling you over the flame for two years. Give it up before he burns you again.”

I gulped hard; all other thoughts were doused. “You’re right baby, lets eat. What we having?”

“It WAS hot meat loaf. Now it’s cold cuts.”

“Heat up the meat loaf.” I tried to save dinner and my cooling relationship.

“Can’t, was in the oven too long, now it’s charred. If you’d been here on time.” She turned and walked away with a tear in her eye.

I loved her when she was mad. She was a hot tomato. “Come over here baby, we can warm up the room.”

“Take a cold shower, Sizzle.” She slammed the door and locked herself in the bathroom.

I guess the moral of the story is chasing Sparks in the fog won’t set a fire under Pepper. I’m Coal Sizzle, private eye, and tortured lover.


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lynn gipson 05/11/13
Great story...I would love to read the book! As usual, you write an interesting, humorous, well done piece! Great take on the topic.

BLessings, Lynn
Lillian Rhoades 05/11/13
Loved your word "play." You did a great job staying on topic.

The idea of coal looking for sparks is quite clever. Nicely done.
CD Swanson 05/11/13
Nicely done and nicely written. This was an interesting and clever entry. I enjoyed the last line especially!

God bless~
Judith Gayle Smith05/11/13
This is a winner! How clever, how wonderful the characters, and how HOT the story! Well done . . .
Vince Martella05/12/13
I think you nailed the genre here. The pacing and short senrences and phrasing are perfect. You packed quite a bit of topic reference in here!Very funny and quite an entertaining read. Well done.
Christina Banks 05/12/13
I'm smiling. Nice job.
Bea Edwards 05/12/13
That was a grand ride on the word play train! Unique, fresh, and ultimately entertaining.
Jennifer Martin05/13/13
This story made me chuckle! What a wonderfully entertaining read! Well written, funny, witty and fresh.
lynn gipson 05/16/13
Congrats!
Vince Martella05/16/13
Congrats on your HC! I knew you would "track down" a win.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/16/13
Congratulations on ranking 4 in your level and 28 overall!