The Official Writing Challenge
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04/26/13
Well, I liked the interchanging dialog and wondered where it was going, and although I read this twice I fear my ignorance is showing, the transition to the movie did not fit the original plot. Oh, and people do not speak with multiple stacked exclamation marks. Interesting piece, I need to read it again.
04/30/13
Didn't quite get how the ending related to the story. Dialog was good.
04/30/13
All so real life! Great use of dialogue. I really enjoyed the story. It might be even better if you'd create a little more dramatic ending, or a twist or something. Good job though.
This is quite lovely. It really touched my heart. I did get the Wizard and the Passion of Christ connection. There is no place like home and thanks to Jesus, one day we will click our heels and rejoice in Heaven with Him! Nicely done.