The Official Writing Challenge
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04/20/13
Your descriptions at the beginning were very colorful. I don't usually connect suntan lotion with pus. Wow. I like how the guys were just being guys, and the girls jumped to conclusions. What were they doing spying anyway?
04/23/13
You are a master with descriptive phrases. You took me on their journey and I tried not to assume, but may have fallen prey to that myself. I totally enjoyed your story. Great work!
Colorful and delightful!