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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Achoo (04/11/13)

TITLE: The Anatomy of a Sneeze
By Ruth Neilson
04/17/13


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It's the season,
The air is thick and yellow.
Vehicles of all colors of the rainbow
Start sporting similar color schemes of yellowish hues.
Allergy season has arrived,

Eyes watering,
That weird tickling in the back of your throat
Combined with the watering eyes.
Quick, try to smother it.
Suppress the sneeze.

At least try to make it sound nice and cute;
A polite, almost dainty 'choo.
It never seems to work against
The snot infestation or
The sniffling, stuffy head feeling,

The precursor to the show.
Can't think
Can't breathe.
Can't talk
Just want to curl up to sleep.

But rest doesn't come.
Constantly blowing your nose,
Trying to prevent the lingering sneeze.
Just keep pushing on,
Spring will be over soon enough.

Must...sneeze
Ahh...
Quick! Grab a tissue
...ahhh...
Batten down the hatches!
......ahhh...

She’s going to blow
Hold the tissue close;
Watch it tatter under the hurricane force
Winds erupting from her mouth
ACHOO!


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Christina Banks 04/20/13
"She’s going to blow
Hold the tissue close;
Watch it tatter under the hurricane force
Winds erupting from her mouth"

I love it!
Beth LaBuff 04/23/13
I love the way you dissected a sneeze and the lesson that not much can be done to soften its blow (sorry about the pun). I enjoyed this immensely. :)
Judith Gayle Smith04/24/13
This is very cute. You have time to "throw a brick" and get more happy readers.
Alicia Renkema04/25/13
I thought this was well constructed mostly because you start out so calm, cool and collected -- like, oh well, allergy season is here. Then you conclude the piece with "batten down the hatches," and talking about the "hurricane force" of the now-cannot-be-deterred-Achoo! Your ending was hilarious! Well done.
Alicia Renkema04/25/13
I also like where you said, "at least make it try to sound polite with a dainty "achoo." But of course, no can do... Ha, that rhymes!