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03/08/13
This was such a joy to read about Peter and John as boys, playing just the way 8 year old boys play today. Then to wrap it up the way you did with Jesus' resurrection is just lovely, making this a fine story given the coming Easter Season.

Very well done!
03/08/13
This is an interesting, timely piece, and certainly well written. I was bothered by the tone of the ending. It would seem to be contrary to scripture that the two apostles ran back, laughing with joy to tell the others, especially in Peter's case. Luke 24:12 says "Peter, however, got up and ran to the tomb. Bending over, he saw the strips of linen lying by themselves, and he went away, wondering to himself what had happened." (NIV) Be careful not to contradict scripture.
03/09/13
Loved it. You did well to bring the scene to life and tie the race of their adult lives back to their childhood.