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03/08/13
A touching story that is so well-defined; with light, ironic touches of humour; before the tragedy provides its own wake-up call.
03/12/13
Such a sad and tragic ending! I like how you symbolized his personality with his tie. It might have helped to write out the verse instead of assuming the reader knew the passage or went to look it up.
Well written.
03/12/13
Such a sad and tragic ending. I'm going to have to look up the verse in Luke. Unfortunately, real life has more Dark Blue Joe's than any of us realize.
03/14/13
Fiona, sorry to be late in reading this. My time is so consumed lately with caring for elderly parents, I don’t have the time to read and comment as I used to. Often do not even have time to present a story of my own. I miss reading all the stories too.

This story was so well done, then “tied” with such an important message! Such a tragic story of your MC’s life, but an even greater tragedy you put before us at the end…promised prayer that never happened! How many people tell another, I will pray for you and/or your situation and then never do! I myself am guilty of forgetting to pray for people or things I have intended to, said I would pray for! That very thing had been bothering me even before I read your story! I have started now praying the instant I promise, so I do not forget! Prayer is one of the most precious gifts we can give anyone and its importance not to be taken lightly, as your story so powerfully points out! Great job!
Oh my, I have tears and goosebumps trailing down my body. This is an awesome piece. The only reason I can think of of why it didn't rank at the top is maybe the judges scored it low on topic, I thought it was great though and it is one of my all time favorites. I did notice that nonetheless is one word, but that could be a UK vs US thing and it is a tiny thing. Congratulations on ranking 35 overall! I feel guilty saying that because I think this should be closer to the top, but then what do I know? I know what I know, and I know I loved it!