The Official Writing Challenge
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02/23/13
So Donna took a 'dinghy' view of what you have described with such skill. I love your words pictures, like 'blowing out the candles on car 5,' and how you've linked the boy's love of playing cars with his grasp of the boat's steering wheel - and the unexpected outcome. Great writing.
02/23/13
This was exciting with a bit of humor mixed in. Very well written and great read. Well done!
02/23/13
Great job! I thought this was clever, witty and didn't want it to end.

Nicely done. God bless~
This one made me smile. I enjoyed the easy style of your dialogue. The ending was perfect. I thought it was funny that you framed the key! Great job.
I want more of your wonderful adventures!!!
02/24/13
Skilled writing, great imagery and such an exciting read.
I loved everything about this "grab-you-by-the-collar read. It was humorous, suspenseful and unpredictable. Even with the title and the intro, by the time you started talking about the MC's hopes for his son Tyke, I thought the story was going to be more about that and fishing. I loved all of the language you used with your character's and the on going monologue for your MC as well. I love anything to do with the water; fishing; boats, so this was pleasure through and through. But your clever use of weaving a story for the reader so the reader is really "along for the journey" is priceless. Thanks for the fun adventure! I also loved the framed key and the fact that it was not found in Tyke's life jacket in time.
This was a great, humourous, adventure story. I really liked the dialogue, and all the color you put into the story. I also liked the framed key on the wall.
God Bless.
02/25/13
This is a rich story full of suspense, humor, adventure--with a cute little boy thrown in for good measure! :) Your dialogue and descriptions are excellent, your use of the "key" topic perfect, and the ending brought a smile! Terrific job!
02/26/13
Oh I just adored this humorous piece right from the start. Your descriptions of tide and moon phase watching reminded me of my own daily sometimes hourly review of wind-tide combinations to find those epic on the water adventure moments. And your perfect character representations of Tyke and his mama! heheehe but wait...for a grand finale, your own self depreciating (in a witty way) look at your self. Priceless!!
02/28/13
Congratulations!

Wing His Words!
02/28/13
WOOOOOOOOO-HOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!! CONGRATULATIONS, VIRGIL!! FIRST PLACE! Not bad at all!! :D This story really was superb and totally deserves this honor! WAY TO WRITE!! :)
No doubt about it, this is a first class story all the way. You are an amazing writer. Now you can frame your "Key win" along side Tyke's life jacket and key! Way to go -- Congrats!
02/28/13
Congratulations Virgil. This is a well deserved win!
02/28/13
Whoo Hoooo too!!!
You kept me aboard, mate, with every word. Congratulations!
02/28/13
Congrats! God Bless~
Congratulations Virgil! You are never a boring read!
03/01/13
What an amazing story, you had me fearful of all things in water for a bit. :) Your levity and humor was icing on the cake. Excellent work. Super congrats on your EC award!!
03/02/13
This is brilliant and well worth its first place. Many Congrats. Great fun and humour but also pretty scary - your descriptions and dialogue were tremendous. A super read - thankyou.
03/02/13
A well-deserved win. Congratulations! This is a very engaging tale of drama. I like the part the key played (or didn't play at the right time) in the story.
A great job! A great win! Congratulations!
What more can I say than what'already been said?
Dialoge, humor, wonderful colloquialism, masterful storytelling..Congratulationson your win. Your ship has definitely come in!