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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Note (02/07/13)

TITLE: I See You
By Cheryl von Drehle


The paper slipped silently through her fingers, fluttering to the floor to join a pile of detritus. Olivia slumped onto the stained couch and covered her face with her hands. She was tired of deception and intrigue. She reached over for a cigarette, twirled it aimlessly through her fingers, and then let it fall back to the table, unlit.

After a few moments she wearily picked up the note from the pile of clothes and trash on her floor, and looked at it again. It simply read, “I know where you were last night.”

And where had she been last night? Out drinking, that she knew for sure. She and her new circle of friends… or perhaps acquaintances would be more accurate, had done the usual Thursday night round of singles’ bars. After the third bar, even she wasn’t exactly clear on where she had been.

This was the fifth such note she had received in a month. None were overtly threatening; just matter of fact. All gave the same message, though with different wording: “I am watching you;” “I see what you are doing.”

The appearance of each note was as equally unnerving as the notes themselves. One she found in her grocery bag when she got home. Another was on her kitchen table in the morning with no other evidence that anyone had been in her apartment. Under her windshield…taped to her front door… and this one, most incredulous, was delivered as a telegram. A telegram! Who sends telegrams anymore?

She had opened the door to the trill of “Western Union,” thinking a friend was teasing her. When the young man handed her the telegram, she began to interrogate him. “I’m just the messenger, miss,” he said, backing off the porch quickly.

So who was on to her? Her family? No, they lived three states away, and had no idea she had dropped out of college. Her brother lived close by, but he was equally ignorant of her current lifestyle, out of emotional rather than physical distance. Her former college friends had disappeared rapidly, as had the love of her life. Jude had abruptly dumped her last month, sending her into a dizzying downward spiral.

The unease of “someone watching” her was troubling, but also quietly nudging her into reconsideration of her current path. Was she foolish to let Jude’s rejection change her course in life? Questions nagged, and she abruptly rose from the couch and headed to bed.

After a restless night’s sleep, she awoke with a start. She was soothed by a warm breeze wafting through her bedroom window. Then her eyes drifted to a piece of paper lying on her pillow beside her head. It was the sixth note, and it was very different from the rest. It simply read: Psalm 139.

Olivia shook herself awake, more intrigued than annoyed this time. She opened her nightstand and pulled out her Bible that had sat there unopened for months. She quickly thumbed through it until she found the page, scanned it once, and then read it more thoughtfully. A rueful smile touched her lips. Yes, she supposed there might be a message in here for her.

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esther robinson02/18/13
Good work. If you continue to examine your lifestyle and keep it good always someone will surely be touched. On the contrary giving room for rejection may not help anyone.
Joanne Sher 02/20/13
Oh - I like it! Evocative writing, and LOVE the ending. Definitely wasn't expecting it!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/21/13
Congratulations on ranking 32 overall!