The Official Writing Challenge
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02/18/13
You kept my interest through the story, waiting to see how it would turn out. Sad, but that is life sometimes.
02/19/13
Heartwarming, tearjerking. Beautiful.
02/20/13
Heartbreakingly poignant. I pray you will continue with Sandy - and that she is reunited with her beloved. Your story positively begs for a sequel . . .
02/20/13
I liked how you incorporated the nursery rhyme into your story. It was an interesting well written tale that deserves another chapter where the hero rescues his damsel from loneliness.
02/20/13
Oh, this is really good. Sad ending but really touching and kept my rapt attention from the beginning. Why, oh, why didn't he just take the note? MEN!
Excellent story.
02/20/13
One more thing. Please don't it end there. Have them meet again sometime in life. Just sayin'
02/21/13
Oh... How mean of you to leave us dangling like that. I was hoping the train would break down before it left the station. However, this was a good story with lots of 'will she - won't she,' suspense, but I particularly like the end paragraph about God's love for us.
02/22/13
Where is a 1500-word limit when you need one? I have to agree - you have sentenced yourself to treating us to at least one more instalment of this tale of love being stretched - along with our hopes for them.
Even so, I like the way you closed it off - at least this part.
Great writing.