The Official Writing Challenge
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I really enjoyed this story.
One thing you can do to tighten up the prose is to read carefully and decide if you need every 'that'.
Your characterization was great! Thanks
Good descriptions. I saw that yellow sticky waft through the air and under the table. Glad to see your story ended well. Keep writing.
02/21/13
Congrats! God Bless~
Congratulations on your HC and for ranking 18 overall!
Sorry I meant 14 overall!