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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Repeat (01/24/13)

TITLE: Bedtime Story
By Margaret Kearley
01/31/13


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Bedtime Story

‘Its time to sleep,’ the old man said
As he rumpled his grandson’s tousled head
And the young child tossed in a crumpled bed:
‘Just once more Granddad, tell me again,
Of when you were young and what happened then,
Just once more Granddad, tell me again.’

The old man sighed and his twinkling eye
Betrayed any sternness in his sigh,
‘Well just briefly then, then I really must fly......
The night was dark but the lamp flickered yet
As I lay in my bed, I was young, don’t forget,
The night was dark but the lamp flickered yet.’

‘It was quiet and still, but I heard, very clear
Someone call out my name but I saw no-one near,
But someone had called me, I didn’t mishear.
I thought it must be the priest, dear old man.’
‘And then what happened, dear Granddad Sam?’
‘I thought it must be the priest, dear old man.’

‘Old Eli, the priest, was laid down for the night,
He couldn’t see well, he hadn’t much sight,
But he hadn’t called me, so we ‘gain said Goodnight.
I laid down again and once more heard my name,
The voice was so clear, exactly the same, as
I laid down again and once more heard my name.’

‘Three times He called, three times I heard
A voice I now know, just call that one word,
A call right from Heaven, it thrice recurred,
And I answered ‘Speak, I’m now listening to You,’
And then came His Voice, unmistakably true, as
I answered ‘Speak, I’m now listening to you.’

Granddad and Grandson, sat quietly still
Till the young lad asked ‘Dear Grandad, Will
God call me like that? I long that He will.
‘Young Heman, be listening, and bow at His feet,
He may call you once, or His call He repeat
But always be listening, and bow at His feet.’



1 Samuel 3.

(Though Samuel’s sons strayed far from the Lord
His grandson Heman followed God’s Word
And faithfully served Him in music and song
For all of his days, throughout his life long.)


1 Samuel 8:2,3 The name of (Samuel’s) firstborn was Joel.... (he) turned aside to dishonest gain and accepted bribes and perverted justice.

1 Chronicles 6: 31,33 These are the men David put in charge of the music in the house of the Lord after the ark came to rest there.... Heman, the musician, the son of Joel, the son of Samuel ......


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CD Swanson 01/31/13
WOnderful job with this powerful entry.

God bless~
Joe Moreland01/31/13
This is very masterful. I can't really think of another word to describe it. The work of a true artist. A Rembrandt of the word. Great, great job.
lynn gipson 02/04/13
Loved this aaabbb poetry. Wonderful story here and a masterful job.
Cheryl Harrison 02/04/13
Nice twist on the topic. Samuel and his grandson... sweet.
Beth LaBuff 02/04/13
I love the modern feel to this cherished Bible story. Your poetic format lends greatly to your message. (LOVE the format! is it original or does it have a name? ... I'm very curious :) ) And the hope that Samuel's grandson followed the Lord despite the generation in between is powerful. I think you've done a magnificent job with this.
Allison Egley 02/04/13
This is great. I love it. It flows really well. I love how the end note rhymes too.
Glynis Becker 02/04/13
Perfectly done. Great rhythm and a wonderful message!
Myrna Noyes02/05/13
Wonderfully-written poem, and I loved the bit of biblical history in there, too! You did a great job with the composition of this piece, and you're right on target with this week's topic. An encouraging message is contained within, too! :)
Olawale Ogunsola 02/05/13
A clever entry with clear instructions. Thanks for sharing.
Bea Edwards 02/06/13
This is a magnificent lesson and tribute to the power of God's mercy displayed throughout generations. As a mother with 'lost' sons I take hope in the fact that God is working through me in the lives of my grandchildren. Thank you for this splendid reminder from history.
Loren T. Lowery02/06/13
This is touching and beautifully told - how do you do that in poetic form? It is a blessing and a gift. It reminds me of the hymn "Here I am, Lord. Send me."
Alicia Renkema02/06/13
This is such a precious, precious, piece! I love Biblical literature / history and poetry is my genre so you hit this old girl where she lives and breathes. I have never tried to combine the two with my writing. Food for thought... Yet, "story telling" through poetry takes a real specific talent that I don't think I have. This was very enjoyable to read. I love the "bed time story" approach in the beginning before the reader knows it is the recounting of a Bible story they are hearing! Great job, thanks so much.
Pam Ford Davis 02/07/13
Congratulations, Margaret; Keep Winging His Words!
Loren T. Lowery02/07/13
Congratulations, Margaret. This is truly a lovely poem and deserved of this EC Placement.
Beth LaBuff 02/07/13
Margaret, I was so pleased to see this wonderful poem recognized with an Editor's Choice. Super congrats!
Verna Cole Mitchell 02/07/13
Lovely, lovely! and a winner for sure! Congratulations on EC!
Danielle King 02/07/13
Congratulations Margaret. What a superb peice of poetry this is! A well deserved win.
Myrna Noyes02/07/13
Margaret!! :D I'm so happy for you! The FIRST PLACE E.C. and in Masters!! WOW!! This wonderfully-written poem totally deserves these honors!! WAY TO WRITE!!
Melinda Melton 02/07/13
Congratulations!! This is a beautiful piece.
Noel Mitaxa 02/07/13
Congratulations on your well-deserved first placing and EC. Clever title with a double grasp of a story of bedtime with a story at bedtime.
To wrap it up in verse and add a subtle touch of biblical history shows an even greater level of skill.
Phee Paradise 02/07/13
I love stories (or poems) about obscure scenes or people in scripture. Congratulations.
Judith Gayle Smith02/07/13
I love this. Thank you.
Ellen Carr 02/08/13
Congratulations Margaret on your Masters' win and your EC win, both well-deserved. You've crafted a lovely poem around these Bible characters. I didn't know about Heman - never noticed him in the Bible before! So, very interesting as well as beautifully poetic.
Bea Edwards 02/08/13
Congratulations on your well deserved win!
Loni Bowden-Horn02/09/13
Wonderful rendition of the telling of Eli. The flow of the story kept me reading from beginning to end.

God's message reigns and we don't know who will listen to the call.

Congratulations on your first-placed entry.
Catherine Craig 02/10/13
I just loved this. Congrats!
 02/13/13
This was truly a great piece and you deserve EC. Congrats and I look forward to reading more of your work.
Sonya Richards02/14/13
This almost defies words to describe how wonderful and magical and beautiful this is! I am a poet also and many times there is a word here or there that breaks the flow for me and picks at me like a mosquito buzzing around my head, but not so here! It was perfect and perfectly wonderful. THANK YOU for writing this and sharing!!!