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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Repeat (01/24/13)

TITLE: Deja Vu at La Baguette
By Francy Judge
01/29/13


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Déjà vu…Deja vu
One wire of my brain
Seems to know what is new,
Informs me I’ve been here
When I think I have not.
“Yes you have,” my brain argues
(He’s a bit of a snot.)

“When?” you might ask me;
The answer is…Never.
But all is familiar
Of this single endeavor.

At the quaint La Baguette,
I bought French homemade bread,
Watched the owner’s toupee
Shift askew on his head.

Should I tell him, I wondered;
That’s when life repeated
Or so my brain said;
Was a synapse deleted?

Listen to reason—
This shop opened last week;
I’ve NEVER been here,
Giving toupee critiques.

The feeling, the feeling,
Like a wave rolling in,
Let my mind suggest time
Birthed identical twins.

The walls were still coral;
Diamond tiles dressed the floor,
Just as I remembered;
All repeats as before.

A wave of croissants warmed,
A waft of Old Spice,
The sound of faint chimes,
And stirring crushed ice.

One thing I do know…
This doesn’t make sense.
Somehow my mind braided
The present—past tense.

My brain might be stubborn
With its odd recollection,
But I’m left with a comfort
And some introspection.

I wonder if heaven
Shares this same point of view;
At the foot of my Saviour,
Will I feel déjà vu?


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Noel Mitaxa 01/31/13
You can't tell me anything about deja-vu; I've seen all that stuff before!
But thank you for the fun you have put into this piece, and for gently drawing us through it as you lift our sights beyond the mundane and the quirky to that moment from whnce we will know even as we are known. Well done.
CD Swanson 01/31/13
Hmmm. This story seems familiar! Seriously, lovely job and I truly enjoyed this very much. Nicely done.

God bless~
Beth LaBuff 02/01/13
This moment of whimsy completely captivated me. I had to smile at all the sights, smells, and sounds you planted in my brain. Your ending made me smile. And now I want to read it again, to see if I have a moment of "Deja Vu" :)
Sally Hanan02/01/13
This poem is cute and sweet and funny. Adorable. :)
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/07/13
Wow! I really loved this piece. You have this perfect sense of timing with your humor.I am impressed, entertained and touched all at once. Congratulations for placing 11th in level four and 12 overall!