The Official Writing Challenge
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This is fantastic. I think some of it went over my head, but the part about the lily by the loch brought great pictures to my mind. I smiled as I thought of a lily closing up at night to rest. Sometimes it seems plants and animals have more sense than humans. You did a splendid job.
01/24/13
I enjoyed your comparison to the lilly. You did a great job with a difficult rhyme pattern. I liked so many verses but especially the one about Solomon.
01/25/13
Loved the way this flowed, and I loved the complexity.

God bless~
01/26/13
Great depiction of the contrast between all our sophisticated pressures and the simplicity of the lily.
01/26/13
I enjoyed your poem very much, with its tight meter and rhymes and important message. Well done!
Congratulations on ranking 10th in level four and 11 overall!