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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Rest (01/17/13)

TITLE: Lily
By vincent lyons
01/21/13


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How those harried humans hurry
Rushing, racing, really stressed
Wearied with the weight of worry
Down in doldrums and distressed
While Lily lives in languid rest.

Stock shareholders fashion futures
On the money market’s gain
Set their sights on ‘secure supers’
Able audits ascertain—
So few fear fiscal future’s wane.

Waging wars with wicked weapons
Nations gnashing needlessly
Terrorism’s tumult threatens
Unsettles state stability
Transforming their tranquillity!

Chasing shadows seems such folly
To Lily lazing by the Loch;
All the lilies of the valley
Far from reach of wretched clock
Mankind’s machinations mock.

Solomon though gowned in glitter
Lacked the looks of lovely Lil’--
Bounteous beauty none can better
Matters not man’s might or skill,
She’s modelling her Master’s will.

Not His will that we would worry
Strive and strain like serving slaves
Prone so much to scoot and scurry
Restless ‘till the wretched grave—
So unlike Lily man behaves!

Bowed beneath the breeze’s bending
Soaking sunlight’s streaming sheen
Thriving, trusts the Master’s tending
Attests in silence so serene
Omnipotence o’ersees the scene.

Troubled with tomorrow’s thinking?—
Seek instead His righteousness;
Tomorrow’s taken in a twinkling;
Reside in His redeeming rest
In Heaven’s holy happiness.


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/24/13
This is fantastic. I think some of it went over my head, but the part about the lily by the loch brought great pictures to my mind. I smiled as I thought of a lily closing up at night to rest. Sometimes it seems plants and animals have more sense than humans. You did a splendid job.
Francy Judge 01/24/13
I enjoyed your comparison to the lilly. You did a great job with a difficult rhyme pattern. I liked so many verses but especially the one about Solomon.
CD Swanson 01/25/13
Loved the way this flowed, and I loved the complexity.

God bless~
Noel Mitaxa 01/26/13
Great depiction of the contrast between all our sophisticated pressures and the simplicity of the lily.
Ellen Carr 01/26/13
I enjoyed your poem very much, with its tight meter and rhymes and important message. Well done!
A B01/31/13
A wonderful lesson and beautifully written. I think this is one of my all time favourite poems.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/31/13
Congratulations on ranking 10th in level four and 11 overall!