The Official Writing Challenge
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Excellent opening--it really caught my attention and kept me reading. I thought the line about knowing where you will buy pecans next year would have been a good place to stop. Althouh the last paragraphs were interesting, they didn't seem to be fit with the rest of the article.
01/19/13
While it could have easily ended with the line of knowing where you’d buy pecans next year and still been a great story, I personally I enjoyed it all. It was like getting two stories but they intertwined well at the end.

Loved the imagery, I could easily visualize it all as I read, reminded me of summer’s on my grandparents farm and how my grandpa would act. And let me tell you, I could literally hear you in the words I read at the beginning when you were aggravated, because I have a tendency to yell out like that to my husband too when I see something and want to stop—and he gets aggravated at me too! LOL

The story fit the scriptures wonderfully and I thought it was a heart-warming, entertaining story with a great message that I
thoroughly enjoyed reading!
01/22/13
Had me from the first to last paragraph. Wonderful job with this entry.

God bless~
This is so beautiful. You got your point across without sounding preachy. I loved it.
01/24/13
Hearty congratulations on your E.C. win for this excellent story! Your wonderful descriptive writing helped me see the whole event unfold before my mind's eye! I thoroughly enjoyed this and appreciated the lesson included! WAY TO WRITE! :)