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01/10/13
Thank you for this piece that so fully illustrates the possibility of hope, of love. Thank God for the light given in Bible "thingies."
01/10/13
Nicely constructed story with good application of the topic. Loved the "happy" ending.
01/12/13
I really enjoyed your story and the positive ending. Well done.
01/12/13
This was a very moving piece, and the strange thing is, you didn't hammer us with the emotion. Nobody was the "bad" guy in your story, both were just going it alone - together. I loved how you subtlely moved them from darkness to light by bringing them back home to each other. You have a very deft touch and I found myself near tears at the end - not tears of sadness or joy, just the tears that come from witnessing something profound in something so simple. Great, great job.
01/12/13
You have a definite way of stirring the emotions with words. This started out sad and ended with wisdom and hope. Very well done.
01/12/13
Strength coming up through weakness.. Isn't that what those "Bible thingies" are all about? Great story with a clear portrayal of the dialogue and of your MC's inner thoughts. Well done.
01/12/13
Awww! This tugs at the heart strings yet there was no major dilemma, just a couple who'd drifted apart and a shortage of cash. You have a real gift for drawing the reader in and identifying with the characters. Superb writing.
01/12/13
This is great, with very realistic progression. Technically the "we both feel it on the inside" is a POV shift, but I still liked the ending. I have a feeling this will rate highly this week!
01/14/13
I really enjoyed your story of mercy and grace. Misinterpretation colors so many aspects of our relationships which a little compassion and swallowing of pride can begin to heal. I think your story highlighted that so well.
01/14/13
I agree that this was powerful and moving. Fantastic entry.

God bless~
01/18/13
Oh I love this story. You did a grand job of giving your characters depth. You nailed the topic while still delivering a great message. Congratulations on ranking 14 on Masters and 22 overall!