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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Time (11/15/12)

TITLE: Don't Take Your Holy Spirit From Me
By Marie Hearty


I cry out to you, O Lord.
All I want is to see your face, your lovely face.
I feel so alone; I need you to comfort me.
This life is so hard to endure... but I know I must go on.
Please don't take your Holy Spirit from me.
I need his presence within me, like a living being needs a heart.

Everywhere I turn there is chaos, solitude is just a wish for me now.
The demons, they attack me day and night.
They bait me to offend you, and to deny you.
I scream in agony, squeezing my hands to my ears.
I no longer can bear the sound of their seductive voices.
But the mind is weak... as is the flesh.

Oh, Almighty God, why don't you help me?
I am on my knees trembling before you.
Lord Jesus Christ, you died for me.
I have been freed by your precious blood.
But... why all this? I don't even feel your warm presence.
What have I done? Have I committed the unpardonable sin?
Oh God, no. It can't be... I cannot lose you.
I will do anything... anything, to be restored unto you.

“My precious Daughter, I am right here, and have never left you.
But now is not your time.
Work out your salvation with fear and trembling.
My grace is sufficient for you.”

*True words.

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Christina Banks 11/24/12
His grace is sufficient.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/24/12
Wow what an intimate talk with Jesus. I admire your courage for sharing this piece with the world. I've been in dark places like this before and could totally relate to this. Powerful and gripping!
Lillian Rhoades 11/24/12
Very intense feelings are expressed in your poem. How important to know that in times of distress, God is always there.

Even though your piece did not adequately cover the topic, I'm certain someone reading this will find "grace to help" in their time of need.
lynn gipson 11/24/12
This sort of reminded of some of David's Psalms....which I love. I enjoyed this immensely and you are a talented writer.

Excellent! God Bless, Lynn
Loren T. Lowery11/26/12
I do agree, this sounds like a Psalms of David. It's ending as comforting as the conclusion of any of his songs.
Noel Mitaxa 11/26/12
I agree with Loren, in the resemblance to parts of Psalm 22. However it has a fresh immediacy that reflects our time-scale, in our fast-paced world of so many choices. It also reminds me that we will grow old while looking for some bible verse that tells us where we will feel God's presence.
The close sets it off so well.
Myrna Noyes11/26/12
What a passionate and inspiring prayer!

My own soul echoes the cry in this line: "Please don't take your Holy Spirit from me.
I need his presence within me, like a living being needs a heart."

I also loved the Lord's response to the prayer's plea--His promise that He is with us even when we have no certain evidence of His presence.

Thank you for sharing this!
C D Swanson 11/27/12
Lovely and touching!
Thanks. God bless~
Bea Edwards 11/27/12
You spoke spirit to my spirit. There is comfort in knowing we do not suffer these things alone. Thank you for your transparency.
Hiram Claudio11/28/12
I too sensed the passion and honesty of this open and intimate converastion between the MC and the Lord. I was grateful that the MC was so honest with his/her feelings and openly expressed them to God ... a lesson for all of us. Nice work!