The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a powerful story. You truly brought it to life with your great attention to detail. I found myself leaning closer and closer as I devoured each word.
11/17/12
Nice job on this. You may want to consider providing the Bible passage that provided the inspiration for this, so people can read it for themselves and appreciate your story all the more.
11/17/12
I think this is excellent, I really enjoyed reading it and wanted to read more. Oh, this is good!

God Bless, Lynn
11/17/12
I think this is excellent, I really enjoyed reading it and wanted to read more. Oh, this is good!

God Bless, Lynn
11/18/12
This is a very eloquent explanation of why we never hear of baby girls being christened as Jezebel!

You need to watch your use of hyphens and dashes to link the thought-flow and keep your readers with you, but you have a great build-up towards the close.
11/18/12
There's so much detail in here. I confess I got lost a couple of times, but overall you've done a great job with this.
11/19/12
I loved how you described Jezebel's every action and the descriptions of the surroundings. I liked the ending but it was sad knowing what was going to happen to Naboath.

God bless!
11/19/12
I really enjoyed your adaptation of this Bible story. You added shining color to a black and white tale and made it easy to imagine that it transpired this way.
11/19/12
You use some very rich descriptive words and phrases in this well-written piece! I enjoyed this imaginative telling of the story of Naboth and his vineyard, Ahab and Jezebel. Your title is just perfect, too! :)