The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a great story. You did a nice job of building the conflict. I also liked how the teacher admitted he had made a mistake. This was a pleasure to read from beginning to end.
This was a fun piece to read, as it focused on a simple irritation that felt so greatly annoying. And then carried us on the MC's emotional roller coaster ride throughout the day. To its satisfying conclusion. One question: the phrase "over and over" is used twice in close proximity. Maybe change one of those to a slightly different phrase?
Congratulations for placing 6th in your level and 20th overall!