The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a grand story. I could easily see it as a children's picture book. What a delightful way to teach your child about prejudices. Plus the conflict and the characters are sophisticated enough that the adult reading the book might also learn something. You did a grand job of nailing the topic in a fresh and descriptive way while still telling an important message. I felt a sense of peace and hope when I finished reading this well-written tale.
11/16/12
I think your story is quite engaging and a great take on the topic. Fun read!
11/18/12
What a truly delightful and novel way of putting your message accross. I love your words; toppers, hummybugs, fluffy fellow and twinkle plums. Especially twinkle plums! I'm sure you've pulled them out of your head, but they are so descriptive. They so fit this enchanting, make believe little world. I'd like to visit. Do you think there'd be any B&B's?
11/19/12
I enjoyed your story immensely. You did a great job with the description and it was marvellously cute.

God bless!
11/19/12
Oh, this was a lovely, well-written fantasy story with a great message about prejudice, misunderstandings, wrongly labeling people because of where they live, false assumptions, etc.! I loved it! :) Great job!
11/19/12
Beautifully descriptive fantasy reminiscent of the kingdom in the theme song from the classic cult movie 'Billie Jack'. No war as in the song however skewed expectations and assumptions by the upper and lower dwellers could have eventually led there.
Superb writing!
11/20/12
Engaging and disarming work. Well written.
11/21/12
This is really awesome. It really is irritating when people make assumptions. So clever too, with those hummy-bugs and twinkle tops! A very fun read.
11/22/12
Congratulations on your well-deserved win! This was so creative and fun to read.
11/22/12
Congratulations! I loved this entry.
Congratulations for a job well done.
11/24/12
It is truly rare to find a story that crosses all age lines, but this one does that so well. It could be read by children, young adults and adult readers of all ages. We all need a reminder of this lesson and your story beautifully brings our attention to an important issue. Congrats on your win!
11/25/12
Congratulations on your well-deserved win. I'm just catching up (late) on the winners and I really enjoyed yours. It's so creative, well-written and captivating.
11/25/12
CONGRATULATIONS on your first place E.C. win!! WAY TO WRITE!! :)
Great job and congratulations on your EC. Your title trips the reader into a wonderful world of fantasy.
01/09/13
Wonderful message about not judging! Full of hidden truths.